Sentence 1 (character/scene) | Late at night, Mila had scheduled to go on a train. Quickly, she ran to the subway. Mila was so disappointed because she missed the train. |
Sentence 2 (character/scene) | She sat on the bench and waited for the next train to arrive. Aggressively, she played a game on her phone to keep active. Mila didn’t notice a little rubix cube was on the dusty floor. |
Sentence 3 (Conflict) | Surprisingly, the rubix cube was alive. It formed four legs and walked up on the bench to Mila. Mila didn’t notice the rubix because she was distracted by her video game. |
Sentence 4 (Conflict) | The cube froze, then Mila saw it and started trying to solve the cube. At first she got frustrated and threw the rubix on the other side of the bench. |
Sentence 5 (resolution) | It walked on the top of the bench and started walking towards Mila. She was shocked but then calmed down. She tried solving the cube again but had a hard time. |
Sentence 6 (how characters have changed) | The rubix cube gave her a clue. Mila remembered her video game on her phone was similar to solving a rubix cube. In her mind she quickly made a plan of how to solve the rubix cube and in just a few seconds she solved it, and then the train arrived. |
Now write a 100 word story that includes all the details above |
Late in the dark night, Mila had scheduled to catch a train . She sadly lost track of time and ran to the subway as quickly as she could. Mila missed her train and had to wait for the next train to come. She was so mad and disappointed because she missed the train, so she sat on the wooden bench and waited. To keep active, Mila played a video game on her phone. Surprisingly Mila didn’t notice a little rubix cube on the dusty dirty floor. The rubix cube was square shaped and was very colourful. Shockingly, the rubix cube could walk, it formed four legs and walked up on the bench to Mila. Mila didn’t notice the rubix cube because she was distracted by her video game. Eventually, Mila saw the colourful cube and then she started trying to solve it. At first she got frustrated and threw the rubix on the other side of the bench . It walked on the top of the bench and started walking towards Mila.It tapped her and Mila slowly looked, she was frightened. Slowly she calmed down, Mila started solving the cube. She got frustrated, the rubix cube gave her a clue. Mila remembered her video game on her phone was similar to solving a rubix cube. Quickly, Mila visualised in her mind a plan of how to solve the cube. Mila’s train was coming, Mila’s heart was racing but with quick hands Mila solved the rubix cube right on time. Mila was so happy of her achievement, she looked closely at the cube but it didn’t move. She had to go because her train had arrived but she smiled and put the rubix cube on the brown wooden bench, with relief she walked onto the train. As the train left a man was puffing and panting he missed the train he sadly had to wait for the next train. The rubix cube woke up and scrambled all of its colors and ran to the man. THE END |
If you have done the first 100 word story create another POV
(point of view) from a different character or object.
The Rubix Cubes Perspective.
Now write a 100+ word story that includes all the details above |
On a wet, cold night, the little colourful rubix cube was walking around on the train station floor. It walked around sadly, it wanted its colors to be solved. That's when the cube heard loud puffing and panting and then a disappointed grunt. It was a teenage girl the rubix cube thought. She wore white headphones and had blue eyes. She sat on the wooden light brown bench and was annoyed that she missed her train. The rubix cube was curious and sat on the bench next to the girl. She picked the rubix cube up and tried solving it, but she couldn’t solve it and angrily threw the rubix cube on the other side of the bench. The cube got up and crawled on top of the bench and softly tapped her headphone. Curiously, she turned around, her eyes bulged out as she gasped. Happily the cube walked on her lap, the girl calmed down and started solving the cube. Joyfully, the cube tried giving her clues but she failed. She closed her eyes. The cube was so curious but then she opened her eyes and the cube went back into its square shape. All of its colors were solved and the girl tapped the cube expecting it to awaken but no response. She put the cube on the bench and walked into the train. The rubix cube heard the exact same puffing and panting, this time a man ran down the train station and sat on the other bench. The cube saw him and joyfully jumped up and ran to him. THE END |
Kia ora Kapiri. I enjoyed watching that film and reading your story. I especially like the way you mixed up your sentence starters with words like surprisingly and eventually. What do you think the main message of the film is? I can't decide if it's about not giving up or whether it's about having a balance between screen time and offline time or something else completely. What do you think?
ReplyDeleteHi Phil it's Kapiri,
DeleteI think the message of the story is to take some time offline and do activities or hobbies, so yes balance between offline and screen time.
Have you ever solved a rubix cube before?
Bye : )
Thanks for the reply Kapiri. I have never completed a rubix cube and I have no idea how people do it. Have you? I think you might be right about the balance idea. The movie showed that her video game was useful in the end but that she benefitted from having a break from it. Have you made a movie before?
DeleteKia ora Kapiri, what a monumental blog post! It is great to see you showing not telling your audience how the character is feeling. You could have said Mila was in a hurry to finish the puzzle but your sentence is far more descriptive: "Mila's heart was racing but with quick hands she solved the puzzle right on time." Ka pai!
ReplyDeleteI am super impressed that you wrote the story from two different perspectives. Next time you could write from the first person instead of using a narrator. Remember to use my, me, we, us and I if you write in the first person. If you want a refresher on the different perspectives you could check our Class Site - Reading page for the poster about this.
One other thing your could do, is make another post with a Screencastify of you reading your story. You can use Phil's slide (in your Haiku poetry slides) to remember how to make a Screencastify. blog you later, Megan
P.S. I have solved the Rubix Cube when I was 12!
ReplyDeleteHi Ms Judd it's Kapiri,
DeleteSolving a rubix cube is hard in my opinion but that's great.
Can you still solve a rubix cube?
Bye : )
Kia ora Kapiri, I did solve it again a few years back but I don't know if I could still solve it now. It takes a lot of time, patience and figuring out the patterns required to solve it. I bet you could do it too! blog you later, Megan : )
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